Dusk Wing the shadow

[Dusk Wing]

Hello, I'm new to this site, and this is my first RP character here.

Name: Dusk Wing

Gender: Male

Age: Teen

Species: Pegasus

Pelt color: dark purple

Mane & tail color/style: Royal blue, short, and straight

Eye color: violet

Cutie Mark: A lock being picked by two black feathers

Residents: He lived in the city of Manehattan, but has since moved to Canterlot

Occupation: Dusk Wing is a thief for hire. He works for anyone that has a job they want done and are willing to pay.

Talents, skills:
-He is a novice thief, but likes to leave a calling card displaying his cutie mark in place of whatever it is he's stealing.
-He is capable at picking locks despite his lack of magic.
-He moves around very quietly even when flying, but this does require him to move a lot slower.

Likes:
-planning and carrying out a heist
-fedoras
-traveling
-things going as he planned
-flying
-ravens

Dislikes:
-having nothing to do.
-fighting
-running
-anywhere with dangerous animals that like ponies
-authority

Character personality:
   Dusk Wing is very out going and care-free. He can be a bit eccentric when dealing with people, but he tries to be as friendly as he can. Dusk views life as a game that, with a bit of practice, he can manipulate to put the odds in his favor. He likes dealing with people, and believes that, with enough charm, they can be pulled into another's way of thinking. Yet, for him, neither of these have been very effective.
    Dusk is a very determined individual. When he sets a goal he does what he can to see it through, even if it doesn't always work. This determination can cause him to be a bit rash and overlook something that might be incredibly obvious. While he can be rather resourceful and manipulative, it has caused him to be a bit arrogant.
    Despite his skill set, he knows that he is only beginning to get good at being a thief. That lack of practice has lead him to want to be a master thief. He feels that by being a master thief he will have made a name for himself. In his mind is he has made a name for himself he will be highly sought after. He wants to be hunted by the guards looking to arrest him, and by anyone who wishes to hire him.

Bio:
    Dusk Wing was born into a middle class family in Canterlot. His parents owned a small book store, which was right next to their house. They were very controlling, and would often lock him in his room to make him do his homework. While fairly cruel, their method was effective and he was one of the highest scoring students in his class.
    Yet he was not happy with his life. So, he came up with a plan to escape from his parent’s control. He tried time and again to pick the lock on his door, but every time it failed. His parents eventually caught him and took away his make-shift lock picks. While this might have stopped his attempts to escape briefly, Dusk Wing soon had an idea on how to escape.
    Dusk Wing made new lock picks using his own feathers. With these, he was finally able to open the lock on his door. Outside of his house he used his dark colored coat to blend into the darkness of night. He managed to sneak through the streets of Canterlot and make his way out of the city. By escaping his parents and gaining his freedom, his cutie mark appeared.
    He then traveled to the city of Manehattan to start a new life. Here he dyed his coat in order to get a job and not be discovered by people his parents might have hired to find him. Dusk Wing then began to search for mobs and anyone else who might need something stolen. Though, he had little success. He lived in Manehattan for three years, and only got a few small jobs in that time. Yet,with the money he got from these jobs he was able to buy his most prized possession, his fedora.
    Then the blood wars started, and Dusk Wing saw this as an opportunity. While he would rather outsmart any threat, he knows that a strategist would be very helpful to any pony he could help. So he packed up what little belongings he has, and set off from Manehattan. His coat had long since returned to its original color, so he traveled at night. Making sure to blend in with the shadows and flying so that any diamond dogs wouldn't be able to attack him from below.
    After a week of travel, he managed to make it to his destination, Canterlot. The place of his birth and the home of the life he left behind. Now he has returned to use his skills to help in any way he can. Dusk Wing has come home to make a name for himself.

[Stygg Whitefeather]

Nothing glaringly wrong here except for one thing: alcohol. We do not acknowledge the that alcohol exists in Equestria. Please remove that before the bio can be considered for acceptance.

Also it would be behooving to complete a biography/history of the character to better explain the origin of his skills. It assists with our backend system for actions and events that befall characters.

Last thing, don't forget to check out the pony creator flash program!

[Dusk Wing]

Sorry about that. I have removed that reference. I'm currently coming up with his back story. It should be done this afternoon.

[Stygg Whitefeather]

Also, for clarification, nothing on the bio has been approved yet till further review. Admins will wait till background history is complete before considering approval.

[Dusk Wing]

I have added to Dusk Wing's bio. Hopefully making it seem more complete. If not, please tell me what I could do to improve it.

[Red Charge]

As Retort is slightly sick I'll take over here. Heya, I'm Red the head admin here at Celestial Divide. Shall we start? First I'd like to say that here at Celestial Divide we like to build characters from the bottom up, whereas yours seems to be starting already at a high level. Instead of him having a story, how about we make his story instead? You can make him as a starting thief in the city of your choice and together through posting and quests we'll build him up and mold him int what you want it to be (of course taking into account the circumstances that happen along the way) that way, we can really develop and go in depth of your character, rather than have him out of a mold.

This is how we prefer to run things here, so I'd like you to put him back down to a starting thief, you can give him a simple back-story and we can build the rest of his story together through RP!

That being said, the name Silver-Shield is already taken on the board I'm afraid. Can't wait for your changes so we can get you approved and roleplaying!

[Dusk Wing]

I have updated Dusk Wing's bio and skills to make him a beginning thief, and have also removed any reference to Silver Shield. I'm hoping the bio is more like what you are looking for.

[Red Charge]

Excellent! Approved! I can't wait to start working with your character to have them leave their mark on Equestria I'll just ask that you change your username to your character's name via the profile settings and you can start posting anywhere. If you have a hard time finding a place to post or just want someone to start with, feel free to PM me.

Welcome aboard!