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Post by Deleted on Jul 11, 2013 7:55:03 GMT -5
Name:Iron COAT
Gender:Male
Age: Adult
Species: Earth Pony
Pelt Color:Tan
Mane/Tail Color & Style: Fiery red Mane is in the shape of a Roman Centurian helmet, His eye brows are HUGE
Eye Color:RED
Cutie Mark:A dumbbell smashing a rock
Residence:Formerly Fillydelphia where his family held a large Steel factory.
Occupation:Personal Trainer
Talents, Skills: Extremely Strong and capable of lifting extremely heavy things. Quick minded, great at chess. He mastered great weapon combat.
Likes: Hard work. Apples, Working out. Watching other ponies while relaxing. People being enthused to work out.
Dislikes:Laziness, Canterlot, Celestia, Shining Armor.
Character Personality: Determined and hard working. He is quick to defend anyone in need even if it was a former enemy of his. He is constantly thinking and planning.
Bio: Iron was a meek in his childhood. His family name bared down on him heaviily making him terrified of his responsibility of taking over his family steel mill. Giving him the need to run away. in his attempt he entered a situation where a canterlot Royal guard came to his rescue.
This drove him to attempt the Royal guard. . He trained his body to be the strongest of his kind. Able to lift boulders the size of dragons and larger. All in hopes of being deemed the strongest earth pony in the canterlot guard.
He was deemed unfit to join the Canterlot Guard because his combat methods were too cruel to be enforced by Canterlot. He saw this as an insult by both Shining armor and Celestia.
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Post by Stygg Whitefeather on Jul 11, 2013 9:58:53 GMT -5
Few points of concern first:
1). Does your account picture reflect your character? If so, be aware we're not humanoid anthro on CD, characters are reflective of the show. So hoofed quadrupeds, etc...
2). Correct me if I'm wrong, Red Charge, but there are plenty of Earth Ponies in the Royal Guard. Including two Field Marshals, the highest rank in the Equestrian army.
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Post by Stygg Whitefeather on Jul 11, 2013 12:32:00 GMT -5
Also of note. There's no problem with your character being from a family that owned a steel factory, however, it was an extremely large city and as a new player/character, the admins can't accept your family history as having had the monopoly on Fillydelphia steel. Factory is fine, the whole shebang, not so much. Unless you're suppose to be a pony Henry Rearden, then that brings up a whole other slew of concerns.
Now, that being said, if you wish for your character to partake in the retaking of the city from the Diamond Dogs and work to rebuild a steel empire there, that would be acceptable.
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Post by Deleted on Jul 13, 2013 10:10:47 GMT -5
I understand that anthro isnt the point of the RP its just hard for me to draw ponified version of my character. Also his history is just a summary of the FAn fic i made at FIMfiction. everyone can disregard the fact he isn't a guard its just my story arc. I'll just make him hate celestia and shining armor for a different reason on later RPs if i join. AS for the steel factory biz sure they owned just a large one.
Also i do wish to partake it the recapture of the Fillydelphia against the Diamond Dogs.
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Post by Stygg Whitefeather on Jul 13, 2013 12:36:50 GMT -5
Alrighty, but before we can accept the bio, you'll need to make those adjustments first, then you'll be good to go!
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Post by Deleted on Jul 18, 2013 15:38:19 GMT -5
Ok jobs done
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Post by Stygg Whitefeather on Jul 19, 2013 8:40:50 GMT -5
Second paragraph of your "Bio" section still has not been updated to reflect the encompassing of all 3 pony races.
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Post by Deleted on Jul 19, 2013 23:17:21 GMT -5
Ok then
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Post by Stygg Whitefeather on Jul 20, 2013 10:31:48 GMT -5
Alrighty, good to go. One pro-tip though, just be aware of typos or structure mistakes. It's not a terribly big deal, but doing a read through of your posts could help avoid any wonky mistakes.
With that said, get posting.
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